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    Grandeur - Jay Bee

    This track is a bit out of my comfort zone but the beat made me rap like this. Hope you guys like it.

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    Re: Grandeur - Jay Bee

    You're pretty good, bruh. Better than what I expected. You actually know how to carry a flow without botching it up every other bar. Lyrics weren't that bad either. I don't really like the beat tho...

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    Wow @ at the Granduer track... that shit Crary! You make the truth sound great. Alot of artists cant do that. You arent just rhymin for the sake of rhymin. You stuck to the topic without astrayin from the point. Its worth a purchase... I would rather buy it than download it for free

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    This track is a bit out of my comfort zone but the beat made me rap like this. Hope you guys like it.

    Grandeur - Produced By the BeatMites by Jay Bee

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    Re: Grandeur - Jay Bee

    The flow is tight, just needs to be tightened up a bit; it drags in a few places you could fix it by cutting and moving the vocals a little earlier -- overall it's pretty dope though man, vocals sound pretty clean and sit in the mix nicely. Add some doubles and adlibs and it'll really accentuate the flow and make this jam; keep it up man

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    Re: Grandeur - Jay Bee

    I really appreciate the great feedback morphineroberts, if you don't mind imma use it as press for my reverbnation page!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Dinho925 View Post
    I really appreciate the great feedback morphineroberts, if you don't mind imma use it as press for my reverbnation page!
    You got it on itunes available for purchase yet?

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    Re: Grandeur - Jay Bee

    very good man. your flow is on the beat all the time. but one thing i will say that you went with same all over the song, i think you should change your pace or something in your verses to make the song more interesting. but all over it is quite good man.

    flow: flow is on the point so i will give you 4.5/5 in this.
    lyrics: well (i didn't understand much) but i get most of it and it is cool. so 4/5

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    Re: Grandeur - Jay Bee

    This is a pretty dope track. Beat is hella dope and you did justice. if this is out of your comfort zone, keep doin dat, it only makes you a better rapper.

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    Re: Grandeur - Jay Bee

    cool beat bro. steady flow throughout. i like the multies that kept it goin.
    only small perk is the delivery. its good, just a bit more character/emotion or fluidness would put this on point even more.
    it kinda sounds like you reading, or kinda flat tone.
    other than that, you solid bruh.
    you mentioned the beat making u rap outta ya comfort zone... what did you mean by that??,
    cuz it sounds similar to the niggas in paris remix.
    if this is outta ya comfort zone, then which one of your songs represents an example thats "in your comfort zone" ?
    and you make ya own beats too?? i gotta get back on my beatmaking grind too.
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    Re: Grandeur - Jay Bee

    @MOrphineRobert, Nah man i wanna build a bigger fan base before selling anything on iTunes! Spread the word to your friends if you can! =)
    @ThaProfessor, Thanks man I will do this til i cant no more.
    @YungDiezel, I meant that the beat is really demanding of a steady flow from beginnin to end. We should make a track together! And i dont make beats i have a producer team that makes them.
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    Re: Grandeur - Jay Bee

    Beat - Nahh.. Flow = Good = Lyrics = Par.. 3/5 . Like this man, keep it up!

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