Rembrandt - Demons and The World Needs Change

[ATLien666]

So, I've changed my name and shit while working on this new mixtape. Monster will be droppin' soon, it will be no hooks or anything, just straight bars. Then after that, I'm workin' a concept mixtape.

Demons:
Rembrandt - Demons - YouTube

The World Needs Change:
Rembrandt - The World Needs Change - YouTube

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J-Smooth- Lord Knows Remix

[TupacShaquer]

Selena Gomez ain't all that

Lol anyways,
Demons:
I felt like the delivery could have been better. Lyrics were alright, could have been better.
To short, felt like it could have been longer. Its decent though. I like it

But now world needs change is doper !!!
Better lyricism, "Our president is black but we thought that would change things, but fuck it we still subject to the same things"

Again delivery needs to be better imo.
But flow was there , felt the mixing threw it off.

[mykill]

"Doin' a 9 - 5 is basically suicide..." did great right there. after a few bars you fall off and start to revert back to your old flow. Keep working on this. You almost got it. Just need more practice.

Flow on the 2nd song was your old style. Are you writing things and then finding a beat? You gotta find the right beat for what you right and even then you gotta rap it for the beat. If you did acapellas your shit was be mega hot, but you sometimes put it to the wrong beat and then it just sounds awkward. Keep grindin' mane.

like the name change those. pretty dope.

[MC_Crary]

Youve always had some really introspective lyrics for such a young guy. Thats your strong suit. You gotta get that flow going though homie, it still needs major work. Myk has given you the basis. Work on that bro. Id love to drop a verse on your tape if you'd like.

[Cli-City]

is Rembrandt your new rap or are you posting this for someone? .........dope as gif though....

Didn't really like the Demons joint.....

The second joint though was dope.....The only complaint I have is that you were kind of off beat....butt lyrically it is flames......

[ATLien666]

It's my new rap name, I felt like my old one was too generic and shit.

I liked Yung Cassanova. Played well with most of your lyrics

[pgathriller]

(Listened to the Rembrant)

Honestly it seems like your flow could be a bit stronger; it's a little dragging, I feel like you have too many syllables in your lines and they're extending too far, like on the lines "get pregnant for a tv show" and "labeled an outcast or a villain", it just sounds like if the drums were in the track, it would be more obvious where the words and lines should be ending (generally on the 4th downbeat where the 2nd snare of the bar would be0 and most of your lines go a couple syllables passed that almost ending on the 1 beat of the next bar. It's a little off and the style gives the rhythm an odd vibe but I like the presence in your voice and beat selection is dope; goes with the vibe your trying to attain really well but imo clean up that flow a little and this will vibe more fittingly

I don't know if any of that made sense but that's what I'm hearing