freestyle might turn into song FEEDBACK please!

[TunechisFree]

got a red bone im fuckin
clingy bitch she stalkin
camo shorts & a pair of jays that aint even in stock yet
swagg screamin nigga its wackaflockin!
catch me in tha hood posted hella faded
or with your bitch making hella babies
either way im higha then a mutha fuckka
tell em daddys home cuhs nigga im muthafucka
keep a joint rolled nigga we smoke heavy
ridin in my pontiac gto or chevy
widd a model bitch yo know we fuckin
she blaze too puff puff nd suckit
bitch i got more bars then fresno county
keep a edible choclate weed brownie
im tryna get out the hood bitch we aint settlin for hood rich
my swagg is clean my mug stay meean
leavin niggas speachless like mr bean haha!

that was it shoot me some pointers and ** this is my first im barely starting thanks!

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22 views no feedback att all ? come on yo

[TunechisFree]

feedbackkkk please!

[@Poyo_Kardashian]

feedbackkkk please!

bro, just record it cause you cant judge just by lyrics, i need to see how you flow

[TunechisFree]

lets colab on a r & b

[RoadToC4Fan]

got a red bone im fuckin
clingy bitch she stalkin
camo shorts & a pair of jays that aint even in stock yet
swagg screamin nigga its wackaflockin!
catch me in tha hood posted hella faded
or with your bitch making hella babies
either way im higha then a mutha fuckka
tell em daddys home cuhs nigga im muthafucka
keep a joint rolled nigga we smoke heavy
ridin in my pontiac gto or chevy
widd a model bitch yo know we fuckin
she blaze too puff puff nd suckit
bitch i got more bars then fresno county
keep a edible choclate weed brownie
im tryna get out the hood bitch we aint settlin for hood rich
my swagg is clean my mug stay meean
leavin niggas speachless like mr bean haha!

that was it shoot me some pointers and ** this is my first im barely starting thanks!

---------- Post added at 01:12 PM ---------- Previous post was at 10:43 AM ----------

22 views no feedback att all ? come on yo

The lyrics don't seem that good to be honest.

Keep trying though. Build up on a concept or an idea, and try to rhyme more.

[TunechisFree]

The lyrics don't seem that good to be honest.

Keep trying though. Build up on a concept or an idea, and try to rhyme more.

thanks i know i do its just kinda hard idk what to write or if its cheesy or what idk how should i start

[RoadToC4Fan]

thanks i know i do its just kinda hard idk what to write or if its cheesy or what idk how should i start

Just listen to some instrumentals and give yourself an idea of the type of a mood/theme of the lyrics you want to spit. In your lyrics, picture yourself as something like a character and build a story based off of that.

And like @@Poyo_Kardashian said, it would be easier to judge based off of a flow.

[TunechisFree]

Just listen to some instrumentals and give yourself an idea of the type of a mood/theme of the lyrics you want to spit. In your lyrics, picture yourself as something like a character and build a story based off of that.

And like @@Poyo_Kardashian said, it would be easier to judge based off of a flow.

thanks bro & im new in the game i was wonderin if you want to colab? so i can get some experience or pointers if you rap or singg

[RoadToC4Fan]

thanks bro & im new in the game i was wonderin if you want to colab? so i can get some experience or pointers if you rap or singg

Nah I don't rap. But you should practice on your own and build up your own reputation in this section of the forum before you collab with people.

[TunechisFree]

Nah I don't rap. But you should practice on your own and build up your own reputation in this section of the forum before you collab with people.

alright thanks ima write tonight gunna dl some instrumentals where are some good ones youtube?

[RoadToC4Fan]

alright thanks ima write tonight gunna dl some instrumentals where are some good ones youtube?

Just search up different styled instrumentals on YouTube. For example: "Tyga Type Beat", etc.